Nearly all of my students turned-in the first drafts of their personal essays today so that they could get my feedback. Awesome, right? YEP!
The only thing is that they’re huge in length! Some of them really linked a LOT of patches of thought together… imagine how long they’ll be once they start adding transition words tomorrow!??!?! I think some cutting might be in order. Unless, of course, all of their reasons strongly support the topic sentences for each paragraph, which in-turn, support their thesis statements.
Okay, off to read ’em.